Postby jaimehlers » Tue 20 Jun, 2006 23:24
Under Structures
Jump Gate:
"Upgrade increases Fleet jump speed by 100% for each level (can be used by others guild members)."
--"other" instead of "others".
Under Defenses
Barracks:
"Barracks help protecting your bases, the most cheap Defense."
--"protect" instead of "protecting", and "cheapest" instead of "most cheap".
Deflection Shields:
"Strong Shields that increases your Base protection."
--"increase your Base's" instead of "increases your Base".
Planetary Shield:
"Planetary Shields, that increases your Base Protection."
--The comma is not necessary, and "increase your Base's" instead of "increases your Base".
Under Production
Fighters:
"Good fighting unit against others Fighters, Bombers, Corvettes, and small Defenses."
--"enemy" instead of "others".
Scout Ship:
"Very fast Warp Ship, perfect for Scout Space."
--"scouting" instead of "scout".
Outpost Ship:
"Can build a new Base, in a empty astro."
--"on a" or "at an" instead of "in a".
Carrier:
"Large Hangar capacity, good to transport Fighters and Bombers."
--"for transporting" instead of "to transport".
Death Star:
"Is a small moon in size, very strong, and excellent Hangar capacity."
--"The size of a small moon" instead of "Is a small moon in size".
Under Research:
For each technology that says "Each level increases 5% <whatever is increased>.", it is better to say "Each level increases <whatever is increased> by 5%."
Shielding:
"Each level increases 5% Units and Defenses Shield Strenght."
--"strength" instead of "strenght".
